16th June 2017

Creative Writing practices

15/6/17  Noun phrases/ Describing Nouns: Upon the bench in the park sits the same old gentleman I see every morning, his legs subconsciously protect the one bag at his feet.

RELATIVE CLAUSES: Litter was flying amongst the grit and dust, the wind was picking up debris gracefully before smashing it into the cold, hard ground.

The street was totally deserted.

Rubbish drifted through the empty streets.

The sun was hidden by low lying clouds

He walked alone.

The man strolled down the middle of the road.

He was humming to himself.

His wool suit was itchy against his skin.

When joining simple sentences into complex sentences; Use “Which” and  “That” for objects and Use “Who” or “Whose” for people

Eg Object: The street that was totally deserted, was strewn with litter.

Eg People: The man, who walked down the middle of the road, was humming to himself.

Eg: The man, who was humming to himself, beckoned me to join him

Eg: The man, whose wool suit was itchy against his skin, was humming to himself

A place I know well: using relative clauses

The old battered couches are filled with children, who talk and chatter. The rubbish bin is overflowing, which scatters litter around the room. Signs were pinned up on the glass, which read, Phones will be confiscated if used without permission.

 

SUBORDINATE CLAUSES

Red = Relative clause 

Made into simple sentences: It was a bright cold day in April. The clocks were striking thirteen. Winston Smiths chin nuzzled into his breast. He wanted to escape the vile wind. He slipped quickly through the glass doors. he was in Victory Mansions. He was not quick enough to prevent a swirl of gritty dust from entering along with him.

Rearrange Relative clause: It was a bright cold day in April. The clocks were striking thirteen. He slipped quickly through the glass doors. he was in Victory Mansions. He was not quick enough to prevent a swirl of gritty dust from entering along with him. Winston Smiths chin nuzzled into his breast. He wanted to escape the vile wind.

Imagery:

Debit card

“Thin but strong, sturdy and reliable. Its lack of size made up for by its tough surface. A dark black with lime green accents. Engraved with silver detailing of a name and number, smelling like the bottom of a wallet. A jet plane symbolises how far this small object can take you. It alludes endless possibilities, a powerful tool. However, there is an element of danger as if the freedom you’re given is taken for granted it can trap you within a sea of debt after one too many swipes.”

Ambiguity

Danger

Sensuallity

 

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Born in Christchurch, One of New Zealand’s children, dweller of the south island, I enjoy being called Fi, thanks. Spelling needs work. Yep. Nice.

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